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Would this be acceptable to use in a RESEARCH paper?

My topic is "Problems With Modern Education", and one of my points is that education lacks innovation, entrepreneurship, and dynamic thinking. So I wanted to use this as an opener for the paragraph: "If a doctor went to sleep 50 years ago and woke up today, nobody would allow that doctor in a hospital to do surgery. But, what about a teacher?" I'm concerned because its not really a fact or an opinion, so I don't know if its appropriate for a research paper. Let me know what you think. Also, I'd like to clarify that this is not the thesis statement, this is an introduction to one of my points in the research paper: That modern education lacks innovation, entrepreneurship, and dynamic thinking. Remember, this is a RESEARCH PAPER, not a persuasive essay or anything like that.

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1. I think what you have as the modern education lacks……………., it’s a good motivator for an intro paragraph but I don’t think it would be a good idea to write “If a doctor went to sleep 50 years ago and woke up today, nobody would allow that doctor in a hospital to do surgery. But, what about a teacher?" in a paper. But if you do want to include this in a paragraph be more specific about “if a doctor went to sleep 50 years ago…… doesn’t really make sense. But you can always ask your teacher for the help, I'm sure the teacher wouldn't hesitate, and if you are writing as a rough draft you can write it and when the teacher grades it, then you'll get the chance to fix it if the teacher doens't like it....Hope this helps!!!