Natwerk Designs

Please look over my resume? Will I be hire or tossed in the trash pile?

I'm hoping this will only need a few more changes. What do you think? Would you hire me vs. other new college grads? thx Attention (insert name here): I am interested in pursuing the job opening in your marketing department, because my experience and enthusiasm to diversify my skills will compliment your company’s overall goal to promote brand awareness and improve customer relations. I am passionate about the opportunities I pursue and am confident that my experience in marketing, social media, sales, and journalism will make me a good fit for your company. Since 2008, I developed and self-managed a successful online jewelry and collectibles business, where I was awarded Ebay Power Seller status for my consistency with good customer service and high quality merchandise. I also developed and managed a Website for a family owned construction company that required proficient use of applications like Cyberduck and iweb. By developing flyers and business cards that I distributed at local events I helped the company build community exposure and expand its building contracts for an additional year. Recently, I served as a content writer and copy editor for the Rescue Mission’s monthly newsletter. Part of my duties included writing copy for a 20,000+ audience, performing editing duties for the CEO and other executive staff, and designing and managing a smaller biweekly newsletter for the Rescue Mission Youth Program. Working with the organization required proficiency of Microsoft Office Suite, the creative ability to cultivate and successfully manage an online blog that raises awareness of child homelessness, and good knowledge of the Associated Press writing style. Among the rewards was building a loyal readership for the Rescue Mission’s social media channels and attaining a celebrity endorsement via his Facebook fan page. My principle goal is to invest myself into an enterprise I’m passionate about, and to diversify my skills along the way. I am a firm believer that education does not stop after college and that striving for self-improvement in my career and my personal life will maximize my ability to approach goals successfully. I look forward to speaking with you in the coming weeks about how I can help promote your marketing team. Best Regards, Stacey XXX PS: I will follow up in two weeks to confirm that you received this material, and to inquire about setting up an interview. Edit: It's actually "improve your marketing team" I'm sure you know I meant "cover letter." My 3-year-old was nagging me as I was posting this and I wrote the wrong word. Originally I did not have the PS. I posted this here yesterday and someone suggested I add that. Why do you have to be such a complete jerk about it????? Well, "Curious". At least we know my research/investigative skills are not inept. It's easy to personally attack someone from behind a computer, but your anonymity is now exposed!!! It must be nice to sit your 250lb miserable butt in front of the buffet at Disneyland, Sarah Colnic!!!

Public Comments

1. This is a typical cover letter and not a Resume. The cover letter requires improvements. I have the ability to help you with each, if you would like. However doing so is very time consuming; thus I would like a donation for my efforts. I have made many successful resumes and cover letter for family and friends using several costly resources that I have available. I also have a bestie that is a certified resume writer and she can look it over if any corrections are needed. If you use a professional, it would cost $700. and upwards. Hint #1: It is best in a cover letter for you to catch their attention quickly. Hint # 2: You must limit the use of the "I" word because it is a guaranteed cover letter rejection if used as much as you have above. Hint #3 Remember, You ARE SELLING YOURSELF for a job that you want and are the best canidate for the position, so they need to know you are confident in yourself.
2. Stacey, This is a cover letter not a resume. And, unfortunately, it highlights your inexperience, instead of showing someone why you are capable even though you may lack the theortical background. Here are some things that are that are major problems: - First sentence = this is your opening line = you want to grab the person, that's not what happens you start with a run on sentence that doesn't make sense. there should be a period after department. the word "because" needs to be removed. then the new sentence needs to be fixed to something like -- My experience, enthusiams and diverse skills will compliment your company... - You should mention the Ebay Power Seller but not the way you have. It's not that difficult to acheive power seller. Don't make it seem like something it's not (same with the Mission stuff). - Finally, you don't close a business letter with a ps. You don't tell them you will call them in 2 weeks - they have long forgotten about this letter in 2 weeks. Just remove it... you don't need to tell them when you will follow up. You were better off calling this a resume. A cover letter is suppose to tell me what you can really do for me. All this does is talk and uses words that you think sound good, but instead you just come across sounding like you don't have any substance so you have to fluff everything up.