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I need help putting this in order. I'm having so much trouble getting it organize. It's just an example of how it goes. Its about my visit to florida I love the beach and nature's beauty and fortunately I experienced so many great moments there. Well as you know life is not all perfect. I have also experienced the worst times of my life there, and I believe it's what made me grow, mature and love myself and others more. This experience has truly changed my life completely. This all began on a beautiful summer afternoon never expected to go to Miami ever in my life, being from Oklahoma were nothing really goes on. My aunt (a Miami resident for 14 years) invited me when she came to visit us. She painted a very beautiful picture in my mind, she said that she will provide for me, take me to school, and get me a job. I got very excited and packed my bags right away since she was leaving the same day. My parents weren’t too convinced and were a little worried about me, I had just turned 17 and school was starting in a week. Finally they let me go which made me so happy. We traveled by land, on a bus which took 3 days to get there. The service was horrible(Grey hound) and I would never traveled with them again. We we're waiting for another bus back in Little Rock, Arkansas, and my aunt was changing in the bathroom and forgot my backpack that had my birth certificate, ID, shot record's, social security card, money, and many pictures. Well this was in Little rock, Arkansas, and I came to realize it when we finally came to Miami. I had to report it, what else could I do. I

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1. It sounds good--I would just rephrase some things; For the first part; { Well as you know life is not all perfect. I love the beach and nature's beauty and fortunately I have experienced so many great moments there. Unfortunately, though, I have also experienced the worst times of my life there. Be that as it may, I believe it was these times that have made me grow, mature and love myself and others more. Here is an experience that has truly changed my life completely.} This all began on a beautiful summer afternoon .Being from Oklahoma, mind you, where nothing really ever goes on, I never expected to go to Miami ever in my life. My aunt, who has been a Miami resident for 14 years, invited me when she came to visit us. She painted a very beautiful picture in my mind, she said that she will provide for me, take me to school, and get me a job. I got very excited and packed my bags right away since she was leaving the same day. My parents weren’t too convinced and were a little worried about me, I had just turned 17 and school was starting in a week. Finally they let me go, which made me so happy. We traveled by land, by bus, which took 3 days to get there. The service was horrible(Grey hound) and I will never travel with them again! We we're waiting for another bus back in Little Rock, Arkansas. My aunt was changing in the bathroom and forgot my backpack that had my birth certificate, ID, shot record's, social security card, money, and many pictures. By the time I came to realize what happened, we had arrived in Miami. I had to report it, what else could I do?