Natwerk Designs

Could you give me suggestions about my essay to make it better, and edit it please, i am in eighth grade?

Click! Flash, Flash, Flash! Animations are running through the page, with the greatest designs on the computer popping out of the screen! Where does this come from? Can I be in this business? The answer to these questions is yes! My dream job is to be an art director for an advertising company. I began wanting to have this job because my step-mom exposed me to the Adobe Programs. Then, I began messing around with the programs. Eventually, I learned about her job, as well as what she did through, “Take your child to work day” After that, I knew I wanted to have a job just like hers. Jobs in general aren't easy to get, lots of work would have to be put into it. First of all, I would need to get a degree in Graphic Design, without that the advertizing company would most likely not even look at my resume. I would need to attend college for at least four years to acquire the degree. Secondly, I would have to learn how to exercise all the adobe ( Flash, Dreamweaver, Photoshop, etc.) programs efficiently. This job is perfect for me because it allows me to be creative and I love advertising with adobe products. This job is also is right for me because I enjoy designing websites. Getting the job is hard work, but its well worth it. Website through website, you will always see something new and exotic.

Public Comments

1. 1. Advertising is spelled with and "s" and not a "z". 2. A bachelors (4 year) degree is not required to be a graphic design artist. An associates (2 year) degree will work just fine. 3. Make sure to capitalize Adobe throughout the whole essay.
2. Very nicely written! I just made a few grammatical errors quickly. Click! Flash, Flash, Flash! Animations are running through the page, and some awesome designs are popping out of the computer screen! Where does this come from? Can I be in this business? The answer to these questions is yes! My dream job is to be an art director for an advertising company. I began wanting to have this job when my step-mom exposed me to the Adobe Programs. Then I began messing around with the programs. Eventually, I learned about her job, as well as when I went with her her during “Take your child to work day.” After that, I knew I wanted to have a job just like hers. Jobs in general aren't easy to find, and lots of work would have to be put into it. First of all, I would need to get a degree in Graphic Design, because without that the advertising company would most likely not even look at my resume. I would need to attend college for at least four years to acquire the degree. Secondly, I would have to learn how to exercise all the Adobe ( Flash, Dreamweaver, Photoshop, etc.) programs efficiently. This job is perfect for me because it allows me to be creative, and I love advertising with Adobe products. This job is also is right for me because I enjoy designing websites. Getting the job is hard work, but it will be well worth it. Website through website, you will always see something new and exotic.
3. It really depends on what kind of essay this is.
4. Not knowing your assignment, but since you wrote it, I have made some suggestions, 8th grade style! Click! Flash, Flash, Flash! Animations are running through the page, with greatest designs on the computer, popping out of the screen! Where does this come from? Can I be in this business? The answer to these questions is, yes! My dream job would be an art director for an advertising company. My interest began when my step-mother exposed me to the Adobe Programs. After that, I began to explore the programs. Eventually, I learned about her job, as well as what she did when she took me to work with her. It was “Take your child to work day.” After that, I knew I wanted to have a job just like hers. Jobs in general are difficult to get, but landing a job I would love wouldn’t seem like work at all. To seek this job, I would need to get a degree in Graphic Design, without that, an advertising company most likely wouldn’t finish reading my resume. I would need to attend college for at least four years to obtain a graphics art degree. Secondly, with that degree I would know how to exercise all of the adobe programs efficiently. Just some of the programs are; Flash, Dreamweaver, and Photoshop. A job like this would be perfect for me because it will allow me to be creative and I love advertising with adobe products. This job would be one that I would enjoy because I like to design websites. Getting the job would be hard work, but I think it would be well worth it. It’s exciting to move from one website to another website, because there is always something new and exciting to see.